Firstborn: A Novel
by Lorie Ann Grover
I . . . what?
I feel that I'm usually a pretty generous reader. Books that have been published generally pass a certain standard of "good," but this time I really wanted to question the publishers behind this novel. When I first picked it up, the story appeared interesting: a desert fantasy setting, about a girl born among an oppressed people, who must live as a boy. But as I read on, the downward spiral began...
As a reader and a lover of all written works, I found very little in this book to redeem itself.
First off, the back-story has much to be desired. What is this world? What kind of society is it? What are the social structures, and how do the two major religions play a role in it? Though these questions are addressed in the book, they are never fully explored; at least, not enough to immerse me into the world that she is creating. This is a brand new world here, with new countries, customs, people, cultures....it seems too half-baked for me to invest my interest into it.
Same goes for the characters. There just isn't enough of them. There are a standard amount of characters, by number, but none of them are fully fleshed out. Even the main character, who is speaking in first-person, fails to draw upon my empathy. This may be because her emotional reactions to the situation around her doesn't seem to match up (she frequently gets overly upset or extremely happy in response to things that wouldn't draw out such emotions. Either that, or the author does a poor job building up the drama towards that moment), or because I am not given enough information about her from the start. I don't feel like I got to really know who she is as a person, even though I journeyed through almost 300 pages with her.
And the geographic description is, well, hazy. I don't expect penmenship on par with Tolkien's Lord of the Rings, which is notorious for its detailed description of the landscape of his world in the first book of the trilogy. What I do wish to see is a place I can imagine, even if it's not 100% accurate according to what the author is imagining. Instead, I get something like:
"My glance skitters over the open vista. Beyond the rocky desert and the distant humped dunes are other lands." -pg. 59, Chapter 13, "The Trek"
I realize that books these days try to keep bare descriptions short to keep the reader engaged, but here the description is so brief that I don't have time to picture it before I need to move on.
Also, the sentences are a bit...short. Not that I have anything against short sentences. Many fantastic books have been written with short sentences. But the imperial tone of the narration, and the setting of the story, makes it sound incompatible when the entire book consists of sentences that don't go past two lines. In a book that casually throws around phrases like "For certain" and "Our subservience to you" and "I still my centerself," I think the author can afford to use a comma or two in her sentences. In short, I felt awkward reading it, because I felt that the author felt awkward writing it.
And lastly, the ending. The ending that left many, many knots unfinished, and resolved maybe two problems out of the many other ones the author laid out for us. And one of those resolved issues was only introduced in chapter 80, five chapters before the end. The gist of it is that she runs away from her community, but that seriously doesn't solve any of her problems. I don't even think there's a sequel for this, so not sure how she'll survive on her own in a new country that hasn't even been introduced throughout the book's entirety...
The idea of the plot itself was intriguing. But the execution was poor, at least in this reader's opinion. I have seen many reviews on Bookreads and Amazon that rate this book positively, but sad to say, I can't agree with them. Hopefully my next Christian fantasy novel has more to offer.